Response to Manjot's Question # 3: Great job Manjot, i agree with Cerella. I would have liked to see more writing and for you to go into more detail! You also didn't answer the last part of the question, but maybe when you have some time to fix it up later on you could add on to what you have already written!

Response to Cerella's Question # 1 : Wow! Good Job, I don't think you missed any points! However I do agree with Manjot. Not that you could start them better but maybe instead of continuing on your point make it so each paragraph is stating a new point so start off fresh. Other than that you did a fantastic job!